If you write fiction, then you know that dialogue is an important aspect of your story. Well-written dialogue is arguably the most engaging part of a story for the reader, and it is often the best tool for characterization. But did you know that the way you introduce dialogue can either enhance or detract from what the character is actually saying? What is a dialogue tag? A dialogue tag, or attribution, is what ties a piece of dialogue to a character. It can come before, during, or after a quotation and tells us who is speaking and how they're speaking. The most common dialogue tags are she said and he asked. There are many writers who advocate for using said and asked almost exclusively rather than using other verbs like noted, whispered, shouted, posited, cried, muttered, etc. This is because said is virtually invisible to readers. There are some good arguments both for and against this preference. On the one hand, limiting the variety of verbs used in dialogue tags keeps the focus on the dialogue itself. It forces the writer to compose better dialogue to convey emotion instead of relying on the tag to do that for them. On the other hand, using only said does not tell us how the dialogue is being delivered and may lead the writer to rely on adverbs to give us this information. Many writers frown on using too many adverbs, as these can lead to more bland verbs and a penchant for telling rather than showing. Personally, I think a balance between the two views on dialogue tags is the best approach. Much of the time, you want the tag to remain invisible so your dialogue stands out. But sometimes, you want to convey something about the character with the tag. Does your character just say things, or do they snarl them? And there are certainly times when bellowing or whispering is called for.
How do different dialogue tags affect a sentence? Consider the following sentences: "I'm not going in there," Will said. "I'm not going in there," Will said anxiously. "I'm not going in there," Will whimpered. Each of these sentences gives us a different impression of how Will delivers his line and what he is feeling about his current situation. The first example is pretty ambiguous; Will is refusing to go somewhere, but we have no other information (at least, not out of context like this). The second example lets us know how he feels about the situation, but it uses two words where one would suffice. The third example gives us the same information as the second, but it eliminates the need for an adverb by using a more succinct verb. None of these examples are bad or wrong, but some convey emotion more powerfully than others. Let's look at a couple more examples: "I'm not going in there," Will said, crossing his arms. "I'm not going in there," Will said with a frown. "I'm not going in there!" Will roared. Sometimes actions speak louder than words. The first example here combines a simple tag with an action that gives us a little more insight. Will crossing his arms tells us that he is stubborn or adamant. The second sentence uses a simple tag and a descriptor to convey his displeasure. In the final example, the physical act of shouting tells us that Will is very angry (without using Will said angrily as our dialogue tag). There are a lot of variables that go into choosing what dialogue tags to use: character, situation, focus, mood, voice, writer's preference, etc. Ultimately, how to tag your dialogue is up to you. There are no wrong answers, but in each situation some answers are better than others. The most important thing to remember is to choose your dialogue tags intentionally and not by default. Are dialogue tags more important than actual dialogue? Clearly, dialogue tags are important. But sometimes the most important role they play is, indeed, to be invisible. Let's take a look at how dialogue and actions can be even more important than the tag. Consider the differences between these two examples: "I'm not going in there," Will said. "You can't make me!" His eyes were wide as he clung to the rocky cave wall. "There's no way I'm going in there," Will said. "If you want someone to save your precious friend from that monster, do it yourself." He turned, spit on the ground, and walked away. Both of these examples have the same basic point: Will refuses to go into this place. Both use a simple said to tag Will's dialogue. But the dialogue itself, paired with Will's actions, is wildly different in each case. In the first example, Will is clearly fearful and thinking of self-preservation. In the second example, Will seems indifferent and even cruel. Even without his actions, Will's dialogue speaks to his character. The first Will is frightened and pitiable. The second Will is selfish and heartless. What your characters say and do over the course of a story define and shape who they are and who they turn out to be. When that's your focus, the best dialogue tags don't draw too much attention to themselves. The dialogue and attributions you use are important, but so is how you integrate dialogue tags into your sentences. Next time, we'll talk about how to properly capitalize and punctuate dialogue tags.
0 Comments
When you hear the word "editor," what do you think of? Someone who's going to take your rough draft and turn it into a masterpiece? Someone who will leave your plot alone but correct your grammar mistakes? Perhaps you just picture someone taking a red pen to your writing, leaving it bleeding. Maybe you only have a vague idea of what an editor does. You're not alone. There are varying definitions of what an editor does because there are several different types of editing, often referred to as the four levels of editing. But the lines between these four main categories can get a bit blurred. This is because even editors themselves can't completely agree about what constitutes each stage of editing. Two editors may have the same name for a certain type of editing but a different definition for it. Another two editors may provide the same service but call it a different name. Some editors may even combine two editing levels into one. Despite all the confusion among editors and writers alike, most book manuscripts follow the same basic path. Let's back up and set a good foundation for your understanding of the editing process, at least as it pertains to books (other types of writing may not follow this path). Each editing level has its own important role in the journey of a document toward publication. Let's say we're following Sally on her novel-writing journey. First, Sally writes a rough draft of her book. The way she goes about this is going to be individual to her. For instance, she may outline the plot, sketch out her characters, and construct the details of her setting all before writing a single word. She may just start writing and discover these elements of the story as she goes. Or she may do a combination of both. The point is that there are many ways to get to a rough draft. Once she's completed the first draft, Sally can be proud of such an accomplishment. But the work is far from over. Developmental Editing After a full draft is completed, it's time for a developmental edit (also called a structural, substantive, or content edit). She may choose to make several passes back over the manuscript herself, revising and rewriting as necessary, before handing it off to a professional. (She may also engage manuscript readers at this point, but that's a discussion for another time.) Developmental editing focuses on shaping the story as a whole. Does the story make sense? Are there problems with plot, setting, character development, scene order, or point of view? Is the overall structure sound? Are the beginning and ending effective? Are the writer's promises to the reader fulfilled? A developmental editor will evaluate the big picture, bring any issues to Sally's attention, and make suggestions for improvement. They may reorganize and rewrite sections of the manuscript themselves. Working with a developmental editor is often an intimate and lengthy process, but it's a necessary one. Sally will work with her editor until both are satisfied that the overall content of her novel is exceptional. Line Editing The remaining stages or levels of editing focus not on the content of the book but on the language used. Now that the foundation of Sally's story is firm and structurally sound, she'll want to hire an editor to drill down on the finer points of the language. Line editing is what it sounds like: the editor goes line by line through the text, focusing on language, style, voice, and tone. Line editors home in on the sentence-level stuff. They aim to cut out wordiness, improve sense, and smooth the overall flow of each sentence. As I said, some editors combine multiple services into one. Line editing may sometimes be done in conjunction with either developmental editing or copyediting. Copyediting If it wasn't included with her line edit, Sally will want to get a copyeditor to eliminate any glaring eyesores. Copyediting focuses on spelling, grammar, punctuation, and word usage. Copyeditors check for logic, scrutinize cross-references, and prepare style sheets to maintain consistency across a manuscript. Copyeditors often operate on what is referred to as a scale from light to heavy. "Light" copyeditors correct obvious errors and flag more subjective issues for the author's review. "Heavy" copyeditors use their judgement to fix even the subjective issues without waiting for the author to make a decision. Where the editor's corrections fall on this scale should be discussed before the project begins. Copyediting can sometimes be combined with line editing or with proofreading. Proofreading Proofreading is the final stage of the manuscript editing process. At this point, both the story itself and the language used to tell it have been refined. Many errors have been corrected in the copyediting stage. Behind the scenes, Sally may also be working with a cover designer and a formatter. Her book is almost ready to publish! But all editors are human. Sometimes they miss errors, and sometimes new errors are introduced during one of the previous phases. (Or maybe one of the previous phases was skipped entirely!) This is where the proofreader comes in. Proofreaders are the masters of quality control. They focus on many of the same issues a copyeditor does: grammar, spelling, and punctuation. But they also catch typographical errors and inconsistencies in formatting. Though it is rarer in this digital world, proofreaders may even compare the latest stage of a project with earlier stages to ensure that manual changes have been made correctly and no additional errors have been introduced. Like the other editing levels, sometimes proofreading is combined with copyediting. If copyediting is skipped, it makes the proofreader's job all the more important. They are the last defense between errors and the world. Sally wants her book to be as perfect as humanly possible, so she hires a proofreader to be the final eyes on her manuscript. After investing so much time and energy into her beloved novel, she knows it's always best to have a sharp set of eyes give everything a final look. Once it's been proofread, Sally can finally publish her novel! The Fuzzy Bottom Line Perhaps by now you can see why the distinctions between the different types of editing can get a little fuzzy. A line editor may also perform copyediting at the same time, thereby eliminating the need for a separate copyedit. A developmental editor might also focus on sentence-level stuff, making a line editor unnecessary. A proofreader's approach may look more like copyediting. This is why it's important to thoroughly discuss the scope of each project with your editor so that you're both on the same page. No matter how your editor defines or combines their services, the important thing to remember is to start with the big picture and work downward. You don't want to skip right to perfecting each sentence with a line edit or copyedit only to find out later that you have a gaping plot hole that would have been addressed in a developmental edit. And you don't want a proofreader to make corrections to punctuation and grammar until after a line editor has tightened up your prose. Keep in mind that many editors offer packages that contain many or all of these types of editing in succession. This can be great, because the editor gets to know your manuscript intimately and walks with you through every part of the process. At the same time, being so involved in the story can make them just as blind to certain issues as you are. That's why it's sometimes a good idea to hire separate editors for each stage of editing to get fresh eyes and a fresh perspective with each pass. So what is an editor? It can often feel like a mystery. But hopefully you now have a better understanding of the different kinds of editors and how each one can help improve your writing. Every role is important, but some of them don't always fit into neat little boxes. Ultimately, you have to choose the right editor(s) for you and your manuscript. |
AuthorErica is a full-service book editor and writer seeking to help other writers polish their work with confidence. Archives
July 2022
Categories |